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• 1    renga // Aug 15, 2006 at 9:48 pm

  ignore the dancing shadows
  moonlight glows upon the path

• 2    Gabrielle // Aug 16, 2006 at 8:48 am

  Ignore the sounds of city
  Music echoes in the night
  Beauty in this madness

• 3    Seth Ben-Ezra // Aug 16, 2006 at 11:06 am

  soon the night shall fall
  soon the sun shall rise

• 4    Seth Ben-Ezra // Aug 18, 2006 at 11:16 am

  Well, I’m not going to add the next stanza…. Anyone out there with any ideas for the next one?

• 5    renga // Aug 18, 2006 at 2:02 pm

  daylight brings no peace
  yet dawn shall ever be
  the hope of man

   

  When in doubt, throw in an indirect Tolkien reference.

• 6    Seth Ben-Ezra // Aug 21, 2006 at 5:06 pm

  autumn showers falling
  washing tears away

• 7    James Lansberry // Aug 22, 2006 at 1:28 pm

  oh-it was 16 VERSE not 16 LINE. :0)

  Into a bottle
  Filled with His love
  Ever after running over

• 8    Adiel // Aug 29, 2006 at 9:30 am

  my two cents: (I hope it fits)

  the morning sun rises
  weeping clouds drift away

• 9    renga // Aug 29, 2006 at 11:09 am

  Adiel–
  It’s a good thing you posted, because you were on the list of people I was going to nag if they didn’t participate.

• 10    renga // Sep 15, 2006 at 2:33 pm

  a breeze blows cold
  catching sunrise as a sail
  pushing me on

• 11    Adiel // Sep 19, 2006 at 1:14 pm

  sky like an ocean
  if only I could touch it

• 12    Adiel // Sep 20, 2006 at 11:10 am

  So, what happens if this thing stalls out and we never make it to sixteen verses? At what point do you start threatening poeple if they don’t contribute?

• 13    renga // Sep 21, 2006 at 9:18 am

  Well, we’re up to ten verses already… Actually, I was close to posting a reminder/threat on the other blog during that last lag. I just never quite got around to it, what with life happening as it tends to do. I think we’re going to make it anyway, but I’ll try to stay more on top of the threats from now on.

• 14    Gabrielle // Sep 21, 2006 at 9:49 am

  Dive off the Earth
  Come
  Swim in the sky

• 15    Adiel // Sep 22, 2006 at 2:40 pm

  Someone else had better do the next verse. I refuse to do another two-liner!

• 16    Seth Ben-Ezra // Sep 22, 2006 at 3:00 pm

  frozen moon rising
  scatters swirling snow

• 17    Adiel // Sep 22, 2006 at 10:19 pm

  in this mirror
  dimly
  I see His face

• 18    James // Sep 24, 2006 at 5:32 pm

  Adiel (or Raquel): I don’t get how the last verse plays off the last verse of Seth’s. I’m missing something, I’m sure.

• 19    Adiel // Sep 25, 2006 at 7:33 am

  I suppose it’s a stretch, but Seth’s verse just gave me a beautiful image in my mind’s eye and whenever I look at the moon I think of its Creator so I was likening the moon/ nature to a mirror in which we can dimly see our Creator’s face.
  I’m still trying to get the hang of this renga thing. If I ever contribute something doesn’t fit well feel free to not include it. You don’t have to be polite.

• 20    renga // Sep 25, 2006 at 12:53 pm

  Alright, here’s my official pronouncement. Ahem– I really like the moonlight as a mirror imagery, so I’d like to keep the haiku. Since the link is a little tenuous though, I am rewriting it thus:

  in moonlight’s mirror
  dimly
  I see His face

  Adiel, if you have any objections to this or any ideas for more improvments just let me know.

  Oh, and James– I edited your above comment so it didn’t look like it was from me. Stop trying to impersonate me and maybe I’ll remember to log out next time.

• 21    Adiel // Sep 25, 2006 at 8:14 pm

  Sounds good to me. Sorry I wasn’t more clear. Though, really, you people need to work on your mind reading abilities. I knew exactly what I meant.

• 22    Gabrielle // Sep 29, 2006 at 10:54 am

  In the bathroom mirror
  Dimly
  I see His face

• 23    Seth Ben-Ezra // Sep 29, 2006 at 5:05 pm

  Isn’t the next bit supposed to be a two-line entry?

• 24    Adiel // Sep 29, 2006 at 7:00 pm

  Gaby, I really like your verse. I say you should try to convert it to a two-liner so we can keep it.

  (BTW, I’m proud of you for writing that verse)

• 25    renga // Sep 29, 2006 at 8:15 pm

  Have you all considered mutiny to establish a new renga GM? Because I am not at all on top of what’s going on like I should be.

  Gabrielle: Do you have any ideas for converting it to two lines? We could smoosh ‘dimly I see His face’ into one line, but then it reads like you smooshed two lines together because of the contrast to the previous verse. Which is a great contrast if we can just play with it instead of against it…

• 26    renga // Oct 6, 2006 at 10:53 am

  turn away but don’t forget
  the image clearly seen
  it’s time to start the day

   

   Only one verse left. Who wants to tie it all up?

• 27    Barb // Oct 9, 2006 at 9:27 am

  Let me give this a try…

  Comforted by the fact
  I am one day closer to home

• 28    Seth Ben-Ezra // Oct 9, 2006 at 9:46 am

  my eyes are filled with life
  my mouth is filled with song

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